Creative Paragraphs- Man In Space

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.

A spaceman bravely jumps out of his rocket ship in front of the icy milkyway. The air is so thick he can't even take his helmet off. He might die!

He has a warm suit on to keep warm because it is so icy cold out in the thick air. He has an air tank at the back of the suit so then he won’t die. The pipes are connected to the tank and stop him from floating away.

All around is thick air. In front of him is a portal. This portal will take him to a special most beautiful place called Magical Land.

The astronaut hops back into his rocket ship, turns it on and flies over to the portal. Just before he goes in the portal he see’s earth and says “goodbye!” In the portal he goes.

Pop! As he appears in Magical Land the worst happens, his ship starts to run out of gas. He’s almost about to crash land when he quickly bounces out of the ship. “HELP!” he cried “is anybody here?”. “WoW!” the spaceman exclaimed “what is this place?”

Magical land is a planet where magical stuff happen. There is magical people like wizards, nice weird looking Witches and cute pets also there is people that help you find your way through the whole magical village.